ext_20971 ([identity profile] curtana.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] measured_words 2006-05-10 06:29 pm (UTC)

"Someone with a string presence has just entered the room" - strong, hee!
"He slips back into a neural pose" - neutral, also hee!
"painful join lock on his ankle" - joint
"Their disappointment increased when, instead of remaining on the mats, Oyama collects his sword and headgear and steps back outside the ropes." - changes from past to present tense here.

Dang mages! ;)

And now I'm finally caught up, yay! I'm enjoying the story very much :)

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