ext_52138 ([identity profile] autobuck.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] measured_words 2007-08-17 11:40 pm (UTC)

Well done. Only "problem" I noticed was "as he turned to flash a confident grin at the waitress," which isn't technically dialog and tells us who the narcissist is (as if it weren't already obvious by then).

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