ext_52138 ([identity profile] autobuck.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] measured_words 2009-07-27 05:52 pm (UTC)

Great chapter! I liked the fight a lot. I thought the word "boggle" in the flashback was a little jarring though. It's more like hesitating out of confusion than wondering about something odd. I also like how much of Ayel's internal dialog is a projection or supposition about Nero's internal dialog. It really effectively shows that intensely codependent relationship without having him muse about it directly.

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