"Someone with a string presence has just entered the room" - strong, hee! "He slips back into a neural pose" - neutral, also hee! "painful join lock on his ankle" - joint "Their disappointment increased when, instead of remaining on the mats, Oyama collects his sword and headgear and steps back outside the ropes." - changes from past to present tense here.
Dang mages! ;)
And now I'm finally caught up, yay! I'm enjoying the story very much :)
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Date: 2006-05-10 06:29 pm (UTC)"He slips back into a neural pose" - neutral, also hee!
"painful join lock on his ankle" - joint
"Their disappointment increased when, instead of remaining on the mats, Oyama collects his sword and headgear and steps back outside the ropes." - changes from past to present tense here.
Dang mages! ;)
And now I'm finally caught up, yay! I'm enjoying the story very much :)